tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post470392153313671258..comments2023-06-02T14:01:14.184+01:00Comments on Pure fiction: All Aboard . . . . .Pure Fictionhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04265599089734430505noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-76418630854016849292010-03-11T21:57:33.956+00:002010-03-11T21:57:33.956+00:00some beautiful lines in this poem.. loads of them!...some beautiful lines in this poem.. loads of them! the older men with crosshatched faces, just stunning!<br />I also love the sad spirit of youithful adventure wrapped up in this, I'm reading again! :-DBatteson.Indhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10846214578565824955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-76343717956258497352010-03-10T20:44:56.294+00:002010-03-10T20:44:56.294+00:00Thanks Rachel - slightly soiled chicken rolls - yu...Thanks Rachel - slightly soiled chicken rolls - yum!<br /><br />Terry, thanks for your comment and for visiting.Pure Fictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04265599089734430505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-5362940191306670172010-03-10T12:22:48.280+00:002010-03-10T12:22:48.280+00:00I agree with Swiss.Days can be long when you don&#...I agree with Swiss.Days can be long when you don't have a job.Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16217213425292233182noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-24978451514637244362010-03-10T12:18:22.913+00:002010-03-10T12:18:22.913+00:00I'm with Kat...the chicken roll detail is clev...I'm with Kat...the chicken roll detail is cleverly done. And it's nasty.<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-62767445594202540122010-03-09T18:25:37.995+00:002010-03-09T18:25:37.995+00:00Karen, I didn't see that connection until you ...Karen, I didn't see that connection until you pointed it out - maybe some themes only become clear after a poem is written?<br /><br />Emerging Writer, Thanks for visiting - Am off to yours now to have a read!Pure Fictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04265599089734430505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-15179372908100253342010-03-09T18:09:58.661+00:002010-03-09T18:09:58.661+00:00I like that you dreamt about the station and the t...I like that you dreamt about the station and the trains when you'd left. Nice and circularEmerging Writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06539530495238043923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-77708676202707589932010-03-09T10:57:52.740+00:002010-03-09T10:57:52.740+00:00This is very striking - the trains coming and goin...This is very striking - the trains coming and going provide a perfect backdrop for the speaker's disconnect and feelings ofuselessness and hopelessness.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-78164995091433202972010-03-09T10:57:37.043+00:002010-03-09T10:57:37.043+00:00NanU, thankyou - What a great blurb for me pome!
...NanU, thankyou - What a great blurb for me pome!<br /><br />Crazy field mouse, That's so true about wanting to believe we're older and wiser - and still I'd say most of us would act the same way we would have 20 years ago if put in the same situations.<br /><br />Thanks Argent - It was a dose of reality at the time, that's for sure!<br /><br />Domestic, Thanks a million.<br /><br />Poetikat, I'm glad you liked it. Tfe's Poetry Bus prompts are great, methinks.Pure Fictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04265599089734430505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-6415364822133984212010-03-09T01:01:43.459+00:002010-03-09T01:01:43.459+00:00For some strange reason it was the use of "sl...For some strange reason it was the use of "slightly soiled" for the chicken rolls that got me. A memorable piece.<br />Excellent contribution for the task.Kat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-26683974138970367862010-03-08T19:02:34.903+00:002010-03-08T19:02:34.903+00:00The emotions were palpable in this poem, felt I wa...The emotions were palpable in this poem, felt I was there with you. Wonderful poem.Domestic Oubhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17298706907126418711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-34390949188529999432010-03-08T18:57:03.897+00:002010-03-08T18:57:03.897+00:00This has hard edges to it. Very evocative of a r...This has hard edges to it. Very evocative of a rough life in a rough place. Very nicely done.Argenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10532506690426639326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-9859323900068324952010-03-08T18:38:29.149+00:002010-03-08T18:38:29.149+00:00agree with swiss here, it is the 'harsh realit...agree with swiss here, it is the 'harsh reality' that makes all the striking images. we all like to think we are older and wiser, but so often still retain romantic notions.<br />thanks for sharing<br />crazy field mouseAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-36008985664341900342010-03-08T17:18:56.630+00:002010-03-08T17:18:56.630+00:00A powerful story of possibility, and being adrift,...A powerful story of possibility, and being adrift, and dreams and how we don't always reach them but you can try again.<br />Brava!NanUhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11596765792663269178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-5499051895169508372010-03-08T17:07:23.368+00:002010-03-08T17:07:23.368+00:00Tfe, thank you - I sorta like that line myself :)
...Tfe, thank you - I sorta like that line myself :)<br /><br />Titus, thanks for your comment. Really pleased the poem moved you the way it did.<br /><br />Niamh, thanks. I was thinking after I posted this, I never thought about the different ways you could interpret brutal. As in, 'that was feckin brutal' (just to clarify, that's not what I was going for, ok? :)<br /><br />Swiss, thanks for your comment. You've clarified, for me, what the poem is about in a nutshell!<br /><br />Jeanne Irish, thanks so much, and for dropping by.Pure Fictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04265599089734430505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-14606100593844827422010-03-08T15:13:54.888+00:002010-03-08T15:13:54.888+00:00Dreams, schemes and beams of hope, memories... ter...Dreams, schemes and beams of hope, memories... terrific trains of thought here.Dr. Jeanne Irishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11277286531162894465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-86039824252271222552010-03-08T12:02:01.033+00:002010-03-08T12:02:01.033+00:00yes, this is very evocative. i 'like' the ...yes, this is very evocative. i 'like' the way it portrays that youthful hopefulness getting confronted with harsh realityswisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924594772578153947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-71724269616109104632010-03-08T10:29:09.407+00:002010-03-08T10:29:09.407+00:00This is great, really. Love the young girls with ...This is great, really. Love the young girls with brutal haircuts, definitely a "can't look away until the end" kind of a poem.Niamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-6399368138303069872010-03-08T01:19:08.838+00:002010-03-08T01:19:08.838+00:00I really like the rootless inconsequence of this, ...I really like the rootless inconsequence of this, which so well captures the shifting population of any major London railway station.<br />This was then interspersed with some moments of quite lyrical beauty and the culminating death-dreams at the end. Impresssive, this one moved me.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8625420642690664431.post-44403669912423006262010-03-07T23:02:48.244+00:002010-03-07T23:02:48.244+00:00Great pome, 'older men with faces
crosshatche...Great pome, 'older men with faces <br />crosshatched into shade.' Deadly, and the double edged sword of an ending, leaves you thinking ,wondering , guessing.Lovely.Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.com